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Thursday, November 20, 2008

The Machine- Part 1

“I want a washing machine”, he said with finality in his tone. This had to happen, maybe a little later, but it was destined. The reason of this outburst was owing to the recent string of events that had cropped up in his life.
First there was Ronnie. He would have been more than happy to pretend that he did not exist but there were life functions associated with this…this thing. He ate and he slept. He spoke when the food was out or if he needed something. Chairs and tables did not eat, nor did they talk back. This guy did. He did not socialize but strangely required three pairs of clothes everyday. He slept enough to make the table in his room feel that it was moving around a lot more.
His clothes had been piling up and so were Ronnie’s. It would take Ronnie over a year to run out of clothes and he already had. And for some strange reason, he was fated to wash clothes for both of them. Why? He was the younger brother. It seemed like washing clothes of your sibling came like a precondition when you were born after him. Just like the price tag, which would always have to be in some hidden corner when you bought stuff from the mall. Like a secret smell, which lingered when you took off your shoes at the end of the day. It was just…. there.
So just when the pile of clothes had started resembling a Tibetan monastery, the thought had struck. The earnings were rather emotional, but this was important. Hell, this was priority. So the thought had been presented in front of the finance minister. And that had taken some courage.

***

“Get it”, he said and threw the credit card at him. This was a dream. He surely couldn’t have his brother’s card that easy. There was a catch. And then it came, a rush of pelting rain on a rather turbulent sea. “ Don’t make a noise after you get it and yeah, you start with the dishes too then. Also there is the phone bill that you would need to submit. I hope you remember the maid is out for two weeks starting tomorrow, so yeah.”

“Yeah. I am an idiot. Yeah. This is what I had been pining for when I asked for the washing machine. Yeah, I so totally want to be treated as a complete knucklehead. Yeah. HELL YEAH!!”

He did not say this, but his head could actually have blown off with the vocal warfare in his head. He just pinched his lips praying that his brother would turn into a lump of foul smelling dung and that he would exact revenge. His first did not come true. The second did.
(to be continued...)



[ This is a long story so I am putting in up in parts. Keep 'em feedbacks comin'! :) ]

24 comments:

lukkydivz said...

lolz i thought elder brothers do all that stuff and younger ones enjoy the luxuries :O

Sue said...

Very interesting story... I'm looking forward to seeing how it will unfold!

Princess Mia said...

update soon

Meira said...

Ok..engrossing :)
though in my case the elder sibling ended up doing the dishes :D

Scribblers Inc said...

lukkydivz: I am the elder brother and I do everything...but bad elder brothers prove the rule...glad I am not one! :D

Sue: Do come around again!!:)

Mia: will do! you have a long life...was starting to wonder the other day about your whereabouts and here you are! :)

Meira: Yes for most cases...

Preeti said...

Hi Scribbler...

Niiice...
you know scribbler...it is amazing how you are leading from an insignificant incident like washing clothes to maybe a profoundity that would boggle the mind. i love the way your thoughts process themselves...the journey from the trivial to the significant is something that i would not even dream of missing...
COME BACK SOON...

Beauty and the BEast said...

nice nice.. well thought too. Weaving real incidents into perspectives and shining both sides of the coin...

I wonder where this will go?

So neither is the elder bro the villain nor the younger one the hero..

hmmmmm

happyz said...

Chairs and tables did not eat, nor did they talk back. This guy did.... That must be irritating... ;-)

Suspense suspension mein mat rakho.. come soon with part 2.
Cheers

Chriz said...

another looooong story cut short..
in my plave me being the younger sibling, i had all the fun... sounds diff here.. ok waiting for the next part.. shoot on

rajiika said...

thanks!
hopefully tommorow's recipes pictures will be better, since i plan to do it when there's still some sunlight.
:)
do you cook?

AshenGlow said...

Hey!!! Not all people make their younger siblings work like that!
Yeah fetching a glass of water, running around to get those last minute print outs, hitch to the airport, buying the evening snacks... small tasks, easy tasks...

he better do it.. or else...

as i said not all.. my dear... Heh-heh-heh.. Not all...

But yeah.. i am incomplete without mine :)totally.... your post reminded me of him..

Sniff!
Ashen

Illeen said...

interesting.. the first in a chain of stories.

i'll come back for more.. :)

Creation said...

“Yeah. I am an idiot. Yeah. This is what I had been pining for when I asked for the washing machine. Yeah, I so totally want to be treated as a complete knucklehead. Yeah. HELL YEAH!!”

ROFLMAO!

Please do post more... soon!
Looking forward to how the story unfolds....
Cheers! :)

Stupidosaur said...

Waiting for the revenge.
Answered your comment.

HP said...

haan. finished this part. where's the next part?

that part about the table was phunny!

Scribblers Inc said...

Preeti: Everytime I read your comment, it peps me up totally! If I had to choose a critic whom a blogger would depend upon, you would without doubt make the top slots! :D

Beauty: Think think...socho..abhi kaafi time hai! :)

happyz: trust me, suspense is always good. It gives you a reason to live...

chris: firstly thats a good mugshot! and secondly, the next firing comes soon my friend! :)

raajika:sure thing! best wishes and do keep me informed!! :)

Think Tank said...

omg ..i'm already anticipating..u got me ..pl;z yaar dont go off for such long periods..i missed ur blog so much

Roopa said...

Hmmm...two brothers and a washing machine. And an imminent revenge. I am sure there would be twists along the way. So I am not guessing :).

Preeti said...

:-)

you know, i have noticed that your writing is so impeccable that there is nothing i can do to critique it. so what im doing is raving about it :D
but im sure there would be many people who might find one odd grammar issues in it. its just that i am here to feel good after a read. and your writing makes me feel good.

:-)

CяŷştąŁ said...

GRRR ! You've already forgotten me..*grits teeth*
Aayushi hre,Mr.Aarjaay ! :P

The story till now was way engrossing..I'm waiting fr the next part already !
PS-have started following your blog so that I don't lose the link like YET AGAIn..better that you start doing the same~!

Avanish said...

It was good read...waiting for the second part.

Pranav Kumar V said...

"...praying that his brother would turn into a lump of foul smelling dung and that he would exact revenge..."

Ha!! What more could be asked for to take revenge?? I mean its shit anyway right??

And yeah, elder brothers need to put up with a little filth younger brothers throw at them... But its fun that way, for both!! The younger brother's gone and the elder one would be bored to death in life until his wife or someone of that sort would come along!! I know this for a fact!!

P.S. From a "younger brother"... :):) I feel more privileged when I call myself that!! Damn cool

Scribblers Inc said...

ashenglow: oh, stirring back memories eh? guess my blogs are doin a little more than just giving people the usual "reader's delight"!:)

Illeen: You do that without thinking twice, and before I forget; you are doin some total awesome writing techniques dude! good job! :)


creation:the wait is almost over...part 2 comin atcha!:)

Stupido: Answered your answered comment...now you have an option of re-reanswering or leaving the reanswer unanswered!:)


HP: almost over with the wait now...just there!

humbl devil said...

you sure this aint your younger bro's story???contrary to what you may have us believe...
>:P

on to the next part...

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