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Wednesday, November 12, 2008

Fall...



Fall, fall, fall, fall…

The words kept ringing in his ears, in his head, a forgotten church bell in a forgotten village. They rose to a crescendo, immersing his entire being into the sound of the single word. He had been falling for a while now. It seemed he had been falling for eternity. He was getting used to it now; the darkness around him, the flickering stars which went past him like fleeting memories. Everyone got used to it eventually. Everyone would.

Everyone after all, had to fall.

Fall, fell, fail, fallen.

Angels fell from heaven and turned against the Creator. An apple fell from the tree and gravity took birth in a fruit orchard. Against a manger did the light of a star fall, where God himself decided to fall into being. Faithless are the fallen, for they fail to fulfill the foretold fortunes of the feared.Man failed, a spectator to the crumbling walls of his self created social machinery. Women fell from grace to be burnt at the stake when men decided their fall from honor at the hands of a deprived society.

And thus became the fallen.

He came to rest among desolate looking trees that had almost lost all their leaves. He did not want to open his eyes, in case his sense of stability might be stirred back into action. A fleeting wind, cutting through his defenses decided to ruffle his hair. Something cold, a snowflake perhaps, brushed his cheek and finally made him open his eyes. It was gray all around. The sky matched perfectly as it slowly melted from soot to the color of ash.

Fall had just begun…



[This was a writing exercise where the only cue was the word "fall". Go figure! :) ]

75 comments:

Mads said...

whoooaaa... :| :|
u jumped from fall to fallen to another fall
u think a lot, don't u :O

*bows down to ur writing skills*

Trinity. said...

A.M.A.Z.I.N.G

Sarath said...

"Faithless are the fallen, for they fail to fulfill the foretold fortunes of the feared"!!!!

That was awesome. just one word needed to make up a whole story?

Jadis said...

this is purely cerebral writing.
loved it.!!!

cheers...

Meira said...

Swell :)

Scribblers Inc said...

Mads: thank you...you exaggerate! :)

trinity: thanks a ton! :D

sarath: I would actually call it a thought...it was a thought which shaped our universe.

Jadis: cheers to you too! :P

Meira: Thank you! Come again! :D

lukkydivz said...

fallen

arre bhai i dont have words to comment on this space.. sirf hi hello bol doon tho chalega? :P

Chriz said...

if only a cocnut had fallen on newton's head instead of an apple...

The Queen Bean said...

makes me want to fall..

Think Tank said...

Atishoo atishoo we all fall down ...

Apllying structuralis criticism its the the fall of fallen writyin ... yaaaaaaaaah beat that ;)

Preeti said...

St. Scribbler...

that was almost ecclesiastical.

looks like the state of 'high' passed away...thank god you're back!!!

and i am amazed at how high you have fallen...simply amazed.

at first i felt that the scary pieces were better, but you've just proved me wrong. there is a pure poignancy about this one which is so beautiful that it left me speechless for a while. and i had to read it twice so that i could absorb it completely.

there are so many facets of human existence that you've touched upon and actually made sense of. usually while writing on such cues one tends to ramble and you have kept it very simple and crystal clear.

tch, tch ... ki re baba...??? seriously...just when i thought that you'd reached there you go and surpass yourself.

:-)

Nothingman said...

strange...

the fallen are the fallen and some are still falling.

I like fall.

N

Prianca said...

i couldnt figure out the writing exercise, though i loved this purely cereberal piece of scribble.

would you mind telling me the writing technique used in here? i failed to figure it out.:/

Roopa said...

...and I fall for this kind of writing..sigh ;)

to get the seasons straight, snowflakes start to fall at the end of fall season. at the beginning of fall, leaves just start to fall. those are some bothersome little facts, fall guy :)

Illeen said...

Wow..u ve got superb writing skills.

I need to get my brains worked so as not to "fall" behind.. :P

MAN IN PAINTING said...

very good...
best wishes...
mip

deepsat said...

nice written around one word "fall"!!

;-))

rantravereflect/ jane said...

soopercool..

what happen to fallen in love?
:)
geee, was kinda sure you'd use that one..

but ya're never conventional , soo i guess taht was an obvious omission!

lurveddddddddddddddddd it!

rantravereflect/ jane said...

soopercool..

what happen to fallen in love?
:)
geee, was kinda sure you'd use that one..

but ya're never conventional , soo i guess taht was an obvious omission!

lurveddddddddddddddddd it!

rantravereflect/ jane said...

soopercool..

what happen to fallen in love?
:)
geee, was kinda sure you'd use that one..

but ya're never conventional , soo i guess taht was an obvious omission!

lurveddddddddddddddddd it!

rantravereflect/ jane said...

soopercool..

what happen to fallen in love?
:)
geee, was kinda sure you'd use that one..

but ya're never conventional , soo i guess taht was an obvious omission!

lurveddddddddddddddddd it!

rantravereflect/ jane said...

soopercool..

what happen to fallen in love?
:)
geee, was kinda sure you'd use that one..

but ya're never conventional , soo i guess taht was an obvious omission!

lurveddddddddddddddddd it!

rantravereflect/ jane said...

soopercool..

what happen to fallen in love?
:)
geee, was kinda sure you'd use that one..

but ya're never conventional , soo i guess taht was an obvious omission!

lurveddddddddddddddddd it!

rantravereflect/ jane said...

soopercool..

what happen to fallen in love?
:)
geee, was kinda sure you'd use that one..

but ya're never conventional , soo i guess taht was an obvious omission!

lurveddddddddddddddddd it!

rantravereflect/ jane said...

soopercool..

what happen to fallen in love?
:)
geee, was kinda sure you'd use that one..

but ya're never conventional , soo i guess taht was an obvious omission!

lurveddddddddddddddddd it!

rantravereflect/ jane said...

soopercool..

what happen to fallen in love?
:)
geee, was kinda sure you'd use that one..

but ya're never conventional , soo i guess taht was an obvious omission!

lurveddddddddddddddddd it!

rantravereflect/ jane said...

soopercool..

what happen to fallen in love?
:)
geee, was kinda sure you'd use that one..

but ya're never conventional , soo i guess taht was an obvious omission!

lurveddddddddddddddddd it!

rantravereflect/ jane said...

soopercool..

what happen to fallen in love?
:)
geee, was kinda sure you'd use that one..

but ya're never conventional , soo i guess taht was an obvious omission!

lurveddddddddddddddddd it!

AshenGlow said...

Hey there!

Good piece of scribblework here... I smiled when as i read the last line.. :)

A long break from the internet and i find myslef reading loads of wonderful posts... Heh..

Read all... But i loved the latest one :)

Cheers,
Ashen

P.S: Thanks for the comment on my weblog.. Im honoured.. And i can say that again.. :)

Shoe Girl said...

Had written a story once... bout a woman who says that she feels she is constantly falling into a bottomless pit.

Hitting rock bottom is still ok...but falling constantly takes life out of you.

The constant sinking without halt.

Good post

Rakesh Vanamali said...

I liked this piece for its sense of being abstract and bold!

"An apple fell from the tree and gravity took birth in a fruit orchard. Against a manger did the light of a star fall, where God himself decided to fall into being..........Faithless are the fallen, for they fail to fulfill the foretold fortunes of the feared"

Good write Scribbler!

Cheers

Rakesh

randomrobin said...

That was a good read.

mystiquedew said...

i don understand nothing...:(

scribblers, wots this?
send me a mail if ye got time

lukkydivz said...

lol i had a dream last night...

my lil brother falling from a coconut tree...somehow i saved him :P


me falling from some apartment, nobody to catch :(

results of reading your post :D

Arunima said...

hmm your writing exercise has been successful.
The post is nice & though u had jst one word 2 d rescue...u still made so much sense.

Agnes said...

Well, Fall is my favorite season.

Seriously, a word with so many meanings. You use words in a way I never could -- great job.

go-phish said...

i love writing exercises that trigger whole images from one word! :)

(¯`•._.•[Raaji]•._.•´¯) said...

hmm quite interesting... could be interrupted in a few different ways :-)

swati said...

hey this is simlpy pure talent..making a story out of a single word..gr8..cheerz guy...

Scribblers Inc said...

lukkydivz: Arre bindaas bol na...jagah dil mein honi chahiye...

chriz: OH THAT is something we can all think about..He would have discovered chutney perhaps?

queenie: We all would...and we all do...in good time...

think tank: I am not even trying!!thanks! :)

Scribblers Inc said...

preeti: Thats the best name that someone has given me in a while!! And yes, thanks a ton for your wonderful feedbacks all the time...Writers like me always need the word of encouragement!! thank you! :)

Nothingman: Thanks for trippin dude...your writings are the shit! :)


Prianca: No technique!! :) just plain simple thought translated into words...

Roopa: Excuse my ignorance...I never have personally experienced snow as yet so I prolly jumbled it up...thanks for pointing it out! :D

Ileen: Cmon! this is no contest! You write swell! :)

Hyperactive maniac said...

Mr. scribbler!
nicely written! :D
oh and its 'falling for* eternity' and not 'since eternity'

Scribblers Inc said...

MIP: Thanks a ton...and I really like your writings! :)

Deepsat: Thank you so much! :)

Jane: WHAT HAPPENED??:O
Thanks for the praise though! :)

ashen: Thanks for the compliment! And I meant every word I wrote! :)

shoegirl: Thanks! :) and do lemme know where the story is!

Scribblers Inc said...

rakesh: thanks a lot man!! :)

randomrobin: Random thanks!! :D

dew:mailed you! :)

divz:this is as close I can get to "dreaming about me"!! :D

arunima: gracias for the kind words...do come in more regularly and a warm welcome to my blog! :)

Scribblers Inc said...

agnes: thank you for the kind words...do come reading again! :)

go-phish: Arent they fab? I tried it for the first time though...and its not going to be the last time...

raaji: Errm...you surely meant interpreted? or am I missing a point?

swati: Shukriya! :D

Isha: My bad! thanks for pointing it out! :)

Preeti said...

You deserve every single alphabet of praise and more, Scribbler. And you are my favourite (strange fiction ) writer in blogverse!!!

So, yeah, good luck and God bless!!!

comfortably numb said...

bows 2 ur creativity...definitely u hv a way wid words mate...keep going:)

Mystique said...

wowie.....
where was this exercise?

Anindita said...

53 followers...!!! :O

*takes a moment to scratch the head and ponder*

Yeah well, you deserve another hundred or so... :)

I'm still falling... Into your writing... :)

You are getting more brillianto every time!

Anu said...

Your getting really good.. the abstract with the dashes of real are amazing.. keep it up!

ki said...

Made ME fall, off my chair I mean. Wow. nice! :D

go-phish said...

we normally have them in DU fests right...damn good fun... but only if ones feeling creative... even like the audio thing when they play an abstract sound like an aeroplane or a whizzing thing and you use that to write...great fun to practice outta-zii-box thoughts :D

Priya said...

This is one of a kind!

Scribblers Inc said...

preeti: thank you so much!! you tend to be "egg-oner" of so many bloggers like me...please do keep coming in! :)

numb: thank you so much my dear friend!! DO keep comin! :)

mystique: its a forum which I have joined...mail me up, will give you the details! :)

anindita: I guess everyone likes an occasional scratch and poke to their dark side, and hence the numbers...thanks a billion for the great words! :)

Scribblers Inc said...

anu: thank you so much!! Do come by again and do let me know of the nitty gritties if you come across any! :)

ki: Thank zoo zo much!! :D

Phish: Damn I never took part in any such! :( but its better late than never! :D

Priya: I hope in a good way!! :D

Nomad said...

Of course I remember goldfish and maggie and vague entity, while I wish I were back to writing that earnestly you have come a loong loong way from frozen worms my friend, going by this little gem of a post. Anyway here's to sticking along for a while longer........ cheers.

Nomad said...

Oh also, you have to listen to this track, Eireann - Afro Celt Sound System.
Google it, youtube it, limewire it whateva...

happyz said...

fall is a verb which wikipedia just told me... tum kitne gire (fallen) huye ho ... i understood this after reading about your fall to fallen..

all meshed up said...

for a moment you go numb, before the “pain”..and the mirror goes dark, laden like a sorry little fresco..with images failing falling.. eh dost?

marvin the paranoid android said...

good work here, man... with this fall you continue your meteoric rise in my reading list..

triyash said...

wOw...



real solid ryt....loved reading your expressions and your choice of words....

∂єяαngє∂ ιnѕαnιту ^.^ said...

I was just gonna write something. But then you would have been like "I get that a lot" or may be "Tell me something I dunno."

But I'll say it again anyways. You are fuckin awesome writer.

Peace!

Deranged Insanity

Avanish said...

Aye bahi...

Main bahot he GIRA hua feel kar raha hu :-D

scorpiogirl said...

wow!!! loved the strong expressions and the language used...one of the best blogs i have come across till now...carry on the good work :)...

Nikki said...

Very interesting...

go-phish said...

you mean that was the very FIRST TIME you did stimulated writing!
sheeeesh. this is the point i should probably try and kill myself due to feelings of extreme inadequacy..

*pause*

but i won't... people still need a smart audience to write for! :):)

Scribblers Inc said...

happyz :thanks for taking my writeups so seriously...its a great feeling to see people actually researching to understand my writeups! :D

meshed : well said...

marvin : you my friend have a great username...and thank you for the compliments! :)

triyash :thanks brother, and welcome to the my freaky little blog! :D

deranged :you are one of my fav critics!:)

Scribblers Inc said...

Avanish: in that case my friend, you need to climb some stairs!! :D

Scorpiogirl: Thank you for the compliment, and did anyone tell you, you look exactly like Emma Watson? :D

Nikki: glad you found it so! :D

Go-phish: What would I do without you! :D

Pooja said...

awesome...

how do u do it???
i mean...how do u cast a spell on ur readers??? u r a socerer, dude!!!

Vaudevillian said...

flawless fluency, friend!

I likes wordplay.

WarmSunshine said...

Amazing!

That runs so deep... It creeps up on you and all you can say it "brilliant"

Powerful words, powerful expression!

I'm impressed!

Scribblers Inc said...

Pooja: Thank you so much for your kind words...

Villian: HAHA! well said! :D

Sunshine: Glad you liked it! :D

HP said...

Super ! i love this!

Alok said...

But then Spring comes after Fall...

Well written!

Wormy said...

Wow, that was nice. 'FALL' suddenly seems so meaningful. I'm amazed with the way you have used FALL/FELL/FALLEN to describe the whole Universe and then..[Fall had just begun…]
Truly, this is an art :)
Keep writing!

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