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Saturday, May 1, 2010

The Proposal...

Come here.

I love you.

I know you’ve heard that one before,

It makes you cringe and cry some more

Makes the people standing outside your door,

Drop their emotional fences.



Your laughs, your face,

Your disarming grace,

Makes paragraphs of men

Lose their tenses.



I do not claim to take you by

On a dreamy trip across the skies

Get stars and moons and alibi

To make you lose your senses.



But then again, I tell you this,

My love, if ever be amiss;

You can choose to end my kiss

By poking through my lenses!


[no the blog aint dead...and no, I havent decided to write mushy poetry for the rest of my existence...this is a garble;like it or hate it. Fiction and other subtelities shall make an appearance soon...I promise...]

14 comments:

David Barber said...

I'm not that into poetry 1. I don't really understand it sometimes and 2. I struggle writing it. But, I quite enjoyed that one. I thought you'd not been around that much.

Regards, David.

Scribblers Inc said...

Hey David!

I personally am a beginner at poetry; this is just a deviation from the usual stuff...and yes, I havent been around for a while, thanks to laziness and other trivialities of life!but yes, I hope to come back, a lot more active!!thanks for trippin! :)

Nikita Banerjee said...

Okay this is not mushy. Nice though...

"Makes paragraphs of men

Lose their tenses." classic!

Nidz said...

good write up!! Cheers

mou said...

happened to drop into your blog and ended up reading many of your posts (er...am too lazy to comment on them individually)

i loved the way you use words...am still trying to figure out the exact nuances which make them work...it's like you write intensely, using simple words with a 'whacko' (please don't mind my choice of words), off-beat dark sense of humour and the overall effect is fleetingly eerie and overwhelming (or is it just my imagination?)...

in lack of better words, i find it 'lovely' :P! and am still wondering how you do it...

btw, i read the excerpts of your book...i have never read a 'dark fiction' book, i get 'horrified' by the horror books/movies too easily...now, i guess after reading the excerpts i might have to broaden my definition of 'dark fiction'...cause am finding myself very eager to go through it...

oh, and about this poem, i liked the overall flow and rhythm...but the last abrupt line is the clincher...

P.S. is there any record for writing longest comment or something?

Hyperactive maniac said...

'You can choose to end my kiss

By poking through my lenses!'
hahahahah
now that's something i have to try!!
:P :P :D

(psst...I don't mean, try with u :P)

rainboy said...

I Liked the second para the most.

beautiful lines...

ice_fire said...

This poem makes me go awww...

Dip said...

i liked this.. towards the end specially

Limpidus said...

i promise to poke nicely.

Hiba said...

a proposal worth thinkin bout :)

shrimoyee said...

very very mushy but extremely adorable at the same time....did u use it on anyone?

Nikita said...

beautiful blog...

Zlaek said...

Hahahahaha... hilarious.

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