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Friday, December 19, 2008

Balance...

No thought. Absolutely none.



Everything around you warps into bullet time. No voices, no wind on your face, nothing.Everything around you turns into a picture that you probably got in some old album in the drawer. Colours; they, for once get brighter. You see everything around you in a sort of seeming psychedelic reality. There is this buzz in your ears like you have at the end of a loud pop. Oh, almost forgot. There is this breathing sound, loud and clear. Like that bustling stream that you sometimes come across on channels like National Geograpic or something.



With a gun pointing right between his eyes, he felt exactly like this.

You go to a movie, watch it, eat popcorn and come out wishing you were like that great bod guy on the screen who beats the hell out of those nasties, or you were that swell looking girl who walks down costly carpets pretending money was being made in some free cola plant; but no! This guy upstairs, he got plans. And they dont stick to this script you thought of in your tupenny brain.

"Dont shoot me", he managed to utter after the longest two seconds of his life.

Or you have this day when the signals are all green. Or you find that fifty buck lying under the creaking bench at the park near your house. Or some guy says he is gonna take you for dinner and you know in your head that you saved a neat buck, addin' it up for your rent that you can hardly pay anymore. Hell, your company pays you after two months.

The guy with the gun felt like he was in power. Like all real and everything. Like this was the stuff he had been waiting for all his life. The final destination. Zenith. Stars and Earth.

Say. Say something!

"No last words", he said, and pulled the trigger.

"CUT!!" , the Director's voice cut through the air. " That guy is supposed to die! He is supposed to look scared! Why does he look like he does not give a shit! You think I am rich? Get these guys out of here! Pack up people! We are done for today!"

The man on his knees got up and dusted himself. He glanced at the director and walked away slowly towards the empty tent. The guy with the gun threw it on the ground, and walked away almost tearfully. No pal of his was saving him a buck tonight.

He reached the tent and lighted a cigerette."There's gotta be a better way to earn a buck than this!", he thought and kicked a stone. His phone, as if on a cue, started jangling. It was his boss. After two months.

The voice sounded cold."You have a new assignment. American guy, name is William Mason. He is up at room 15 at The Orient. Do it tonight. Money tommorow."There was a chuckle and he added, "Hope your gun's not rusted".

"Not yet", he said and hung up. He threw the cigerette and walked towards the highway, his beloved bag by his side. He was smiling now. As he looked up, the moon sniggered back, symbolising perfect natural harmony in his private universe. A final thought escaped him, as he walked back in to his life,

"I wish I could act..."

29 comments:

Preeti said...

Beautiful Scrib...

you know i loved the way you have created these parallel tracks.

it is weird how in the midst of something at times we are actually thinking of something totally different. both the parallels are significant, both are priority and in both we are lost.

PS: Good you're back!!!

Illeen said...

You are back with a BANG!!

I had absolutely no clue till the very last line where the plot was heading.. BRAFFO!!

Arunima said...

I quite agree with the above comment.
Its hard to write two things in parallel one being symbolic of other.
But u did it impressively.
Liked the comparisons!

Trinaa said...

oh maa!! welcome back!!!! :D

Trinaa said...

i forgot to mention...the story is AWESOME! :D

HP said...

this is uber !!!

hope you got rid of it :)

Jadis said...

Oh.
Wow.

O_o

Bhavisha Joshi said...

nice still trying to understand...

:)

umangexuberance said...

you really are a pro.. such neat parallels
wow

ABHISHEK SiM said...

YEAH YOU ARE BACK!

captivating narration. every few words down fresh shock! you have left me utterly helpless and clueless about WHAT NEXT? >>>

Eagerly waiting!

And yes, beware of it ;)

Creation said...

So.. you got rid of IT..

Welcome back..

the story.. unmatchable excellence indeed..

what a beautiful portrayal of the two parallels.. each complementing the other... beautifully and very subtly portrayed indeed...
kudos!

Sarath said...

Good one...
For a moment was reminded of Jason Bourne,,
how could you come up with such a description of the feeling when a gun is pointed at you?

Samata K said...

:)

Nikki said...

Neat!

(¯`•._.•[Raaji]•._.•´¯) said...

ahh.. very well done.

ki said...

Welcome back (amazing as always), waiting for more from you. :)

humbl devil said...

and so the oscar goes to...
you!!!
>:P

come collect your award at my abode...
:)

p.s.
am not kidding...
:P

Banno said...

Neat. Liked the parallel tracks. And the end. Just one unrelated comment. Can you please consider changing the black background of your blog, it makes for such difficult reading. :-)

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Mystique said...

very unlike your usual stuff.
i like. it.

Running in circles. said...

It feels great to see something grow, to be able to mold smoothly and give it edges and then break it down.
Amazing.

Sneha said...

wow ... the end was so perfect, i couldnt have read better :D

btw nice blog :)

durjoy datta said...

here after a long time!!!
and this place still rocks...
brilliant parallel story lines...

:)



Durjoy ( Blog shifted to www.durjoydatta.wordpress.com )

seriously_frivolous said...

its like watching a Night Shyamlan movie...good one

Zubin said...

nice..:)

Wanderlust Scarlett said...

That was great! I could hardly keep up with the twists and turns... I thought it was one thing, and then it was another, and then it was another again!

Mastermind!

Hope that you have wonderful holidays.

Scarlett & Viaggiatore

The Shmoo said...

You get a shiny golden star for this one! I really wish I could give you one!!!!

Heart'n'Soul said...

m back here after a long time
Damn i have missed out on som mch but m surely glad i found the link again :D

Anyway - happy new year :D

Margie said...

Wonderful!!!
Happy New Year!

Margie:)

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